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In the night,
Voices are different
Dark twists words and ideas,
Until you see the contours of shadow
And your thoughts are heard so low and soft
They seem to have crept in, rather than been spoken
The world you know is now a spark of light
Seen from the bottom of a well...
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A midnight thirst sent me paddling to the kitchen for a jelly-jar of water and an accidental run-in with my sister. She tiptoed in, late and limping, her cheek raw as red-brown meat.
I caught a quick glance in the chilly glow of the refrigerator before she had a chance to hide the latest souvenir her boyfriend gave her.
" I bruise easily"
is one of the lies she sprinkles like sugar.
But I'm thirteen, not brainless. Besides, I knew
the truth at ten. "He'll never do it again,"
she swears. But he will, because
she'll let him. Now, me?
I've got no use for lame excuses
or imitation love that packs a punch.
©2008-2009 ~babybearxo
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My horrible poems.

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:iconkimaara:
They are not horrible! :heart: the adjectives?

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My computer beat me at chess but I beat it at kickboxing
:iconbabybearxo:
idk, ahah I dont like them

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:iconneedywriter:
Your poetry isn't horrible. No matter how untalented (and I do not mean you) an artist can be, he/she can never create something horrible because the art is an extension of the artist.

This is a good poem; I like the way you attribute senses to thoughts ("and your thoughts are heard so low and soft"). The second part of the poem, however, seems to throw off the beauty of the poem. Perhaps you should cut and paste this section in your comments, instead of saying how horrible the poem is.

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"A man may be a born poet, but he has to make himself an artist as well." Sassoon
:iconbabybearxo:
Thank-you, but i do honestly think that all of it is horrible, and it makes perfect sense to me that it is.

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:iconezgadi:
There's some really good stuff here. Good visual images in the second one! :heart:

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Ezgadi

~Be kind to strangers. Offer them a jelly baby. ~
:iconneedywriter:
Nah; it's not. Remember that that which you creates cannot be horrible because you are not horrible.

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"A man may be a born poet, but he has to make himself an artist as well." Sassoon
:iconbabybearxo:
thanks:)

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Sαrαн;;
:iconbabybearxo:
Thanks

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:iconanimegirl401:
they are not horrible they are godd!!! YOU ARE GOOD AT WRITING POEMS!!:p

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Muffin.xoxo
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dun dun dun da! Superman! *superman pose* Never fear!

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